Monday, October 18, 2010

A Horible Hurricane

            My heart is broken. Today i had a horrible day. In the morning i felt the heat and it was very eerie because afterwards Timothy told me that there would be a storm coming after we heard a loud noise. Right when we figuired out that there was going to be a storm, he rushed and got everything ready like bringing the water keg. We had to get ready by eating a lot because there is a chance that we wouldn't eat for a long time. The storm approched and i was shivering with frightness. I was on the ground  with Timothy for an hour or so. After we went to the palm tree with the rope. A big wave crashed, i got very wet. Then another great wave crashed Ithink i might of fell unconcios . When i woke up i saw Timothy, the storm was gladly over but he was on the ground but still breathing then he was worried about me said "Phillip are you okay?" I was tired and went to sleep but when i woke up, the blacknegro was dead.

1 comment:

  1. Nice! More sensory details would have added a lot! Proof-read carefully - "I" should always be capitalized when used alone.

    Con: 8/10 Strat: 9/10

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